Deborah

words "meringue, traffic, flowers, social, bill"

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Devastatingly sad. Well done.
I gained SO much respect for the writing of others doing this challenge. All the other stories were SO good and seemed so effortlessly written. I was not sure how to begin - so I pulled from my own life.

I had been at Trader Joes the day before. It was HOT day. I was chilling in the frozen food. I had bought junk food. I had thought about opening the meringues when the other parent came rolling up. He told me what I wrote and my son did go to his home for a party when they were ten. My son was a loner. I did think the housekeeper was the grandmother.

But the rest was not true. It was very difficult for me to weave fiction into reality and create something completely different. Even changing names was difficult.
I spent hours writing and rewriting and then posted it feeling like I'd just lied.I'm going to need to keep doing exercises like this in the hopes I can pull myself further from my fiction.



This reaches out and plucks at the heartstrings with a strong sense of realism. Well done.
thank you. I can't escape realism, so I chose to embrace it.
Evocative and so well written. It also feels like the start of something - I'd love to see where this goes.

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