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begin, absence, obstacle, trust, design

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i love this. to read it aloud is amusement for the mouth :) i love all the near rhymes inside the lines, the juxtaposition of unlike ideas and the turns of phrase. if you haven't yet, i think you should submit to Ditch Poetry (www.ditchpoetry.com). check it out :)
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I had to read it several times before I got it. Very vivid. My imagination really ran with the discriptives this piece contains. And I have to agree with Amanda, reading it aloud is a lot of fun!

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