Wavecritter

Giving The 5 Word Challenge A Try.....

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[this is good]
i like this. could be the beginning of a longer story or even a novel. i'm already interested :)

Love the sounds up to and including "a scattered sprawling of hay " but would need bales to make it an obstacle? reminiscing I could see, but why sift thru hay? what was lost in that still winded day?

[this is good]
nicely done. vivid visual.
Valid points, all of them and I agree it is lacking there. I will work on this tonight and repost :)
I liked the premise too, but it needs fluffing. I will work on it tonight to see what I can do to make it a bit of a story. Thanks for the comment! :)
I think it will take a bit longer than a night or two :) It is turning into a bit of a suspense thriller, yikes! :)

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